It was 13:18 pm local time, and I had just gotten off the train in a small town in Texas. On a bench near the station two old women sat and talked, in a very thick Texan accent which made it hard to hear what they were saying. One of them was smoking and she blew smoke rings which looked like the rings of Saturn. The woman who did not smoke said: “Don’t feel bad.” “No, I don’t feel like I’ve changed at all.” I didn’t hear anymore because my attention was drawn to an old man who looked like Winston Churchill. He was standing next to a big sign which said: Construction Zone. In the area there was a man with a tool belt, I could see duck tape and a saw, a rather odd combination I thought.
I decided to take a taxi to the centre of the city, the driver was very different than I was used to. He had a gun under his seat and it actually looked like James Bond´s Walther PPK. That was kind of fun. He drove past a sign which said 70, but no one seemed to pay any attention to it they drove like crazy, but he did stop at the stop sign.
I got out of the taxi at a busy street and looked around. There were a lot of people, but I noticed a group of teenagers walking towards me. One of them had large proportions and I almost accidentally blurted out: “You got a big butt.” Luckily I didn’t because another one of the teenagers had a tattoo of a swan on her ankle, but it had a text above it saying “Raven”, which I thought was weird. Even weirder was the conversation I overheard when they passed by me: “No! Did he really say that?” “Yes, he did.” “Oh my God! He is such an idiot.” Boy, I thought, these Texans really are strange. I shook my head and started walking determined to find a place to eat.
Pretty consistently done as far as the setting is concerned, and the trick of making all the people met 'weird' covers some of the unnaturalized ingredients quite well (but it is a 'cheap' short-cut!).
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I think the title is rather misleading... I agree with Bent that the narrative, however easy to read and humorous at times, lacks purpose. I think the last line should be cut or replaced with something else. You run across bizarre people no matter where you are, in which case, the 'weird generalization' detracts from your narration because it prevents you from creating an image of how America would be different from other places, as is the goal of travel writing. That being said, I think your narration is closer to travel writing than many others that I've read, which mostly turn into absurd stories.
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