Interesting poem. Passionate. The tone reminds me of a rap. Interesting (but not pleasant) choice of words. I wonder why you chose those two in particular?
I Liked the break in line four with what seemed like a slightly old fashioned and traditional piece of poetry - it was surprising and hence the more powerful. Interesting also that you change from rhyme to none at all.
Short, yet very concise and strictly to the point. The mixture of old-fashion with modern day curse words is put together very well and in some odd and unfathomable way makes it more easy to relate to. I really enjoyed this!
Interesting poem. Passionate. The tone reminds me of a rap. Interesting (but not pleasant) choice of words. I wonder why you chose those two in particular?
ReplyDeleteI Liked the break in line four with what seemed like a slightly old fashioned and traditional piece of poetry - it was surprising and hence the more powerful. Interesting also that you change from rhyme to none at all.
ReplyDeleteI love your style haha :)
ReplyDeleteGreat anger. Love poems with angry and powerful emotions :-)
ReplyDeleteA bit of gangsta? Or goth? Or both..?
ReplyDeleteI think 'want' in line two should be 'won't', no..?
Short, yet very concise and strictly to the point.
ReplyDeleteThe mixture of old-fashion with modern day curse words is put together very well and in some odd and unfathomable way makes it more easy to relate to. I really enjoyed this!