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Sunday, September 11, 2011

Emptiness

Abstract surroundings
Distant sounds stretching
Memories whirling past
When did beauty leave?

Vividness is long lost
Dullness prevails here
Yearning for injection
Of divine intervention

2 comments:

  1. Was the original phrase "intervention divine", then? Unusual...

    That said, I like your world creating ability in the first stanza - very effective. In the second stanza, though, I think "injection" is weak and could be improved upon!

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